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A Trip to the Beach by ~chambered-nautilus:iconchambered-nautilus:





The clear cerulean sky,
Hovers over the azure ocean,
Defying time and space,
As the heavens unite
With the vast seas.

Bathing in the sun’s wine,
I scooped up a handful
Of fine white sand,
Only for it to flow steadily
Pass the gaps of my fingers.

I walked with unclothed feet,
Printing its contour.
The foaming icy waves,
Encircles me,
Sending chills through my body.

I come across a stranded nautilus shell,
Its pearly enamel gleaming in my hand,
Holding it against my ear,
I heard the alluring songs of sirens,
And the howling roar of the seven seas.

A familiar voice
Saves me from drowning
My senses in the ocean’s majesty
I walked away, taking my father’s hand,
Back to our home.
©2005-2009 ~chambered-nautilus
:iconchambered-nautilus:

Author's Comments

I still have to wait two long weeks before our summer break and my patience is running dry so here it is the product of my frustration. I made this during my English class so its not that good since I have to cut my line of thought now and then to caught some of the lectures of my professor.

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:icondaiichi:
Really nice poem here..I think some of the words like enamored and cerulean really score you some brownie points and incite the imagination. The third stanza should say "The foaming icy waves Encircle me" or vice versa. but other than that no real grammar mistakes..Nice work for during class.

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Sir, the Plants and seeds are having an uprising! It's a Revolution!!!

Lord of the Farm: Then I say "Let them eat Rake!"
:iconhobobill:
Great,i like this,
It's got alot of good wording:)
:iconsoloact-the-bard:
Ah, the dreams :relax:

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"Scoffers of the Bible's Prophesies tend to readily embrace other false belief systems, ie: rapture, Nostradamus, evolution, & the History Channel's opinions." "It's very dangerous to call one's self a Christian, and call God's Word a conspiracy theory."
:iconlilac-dreams:
bah... di talaga nawala ang nautilus... hay, lapit na rin ang bakasyon... konting tiyaga na lang...

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i have my life to live, to spend and to waste so just mind your own business...

lilac-dreams
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:iconchambered-nautilus:
first time ko pa lang naman gamitan ang nautilus sa poem ko e, gusto ko na talagang magbakasyon! =D

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"Life may not be the party we hoped for,
But while we are here, we might as well dance....."
:iconchambered-nautilus:
thanks a lot for your time to read my work! i really appreciate it!=D

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"Life may not be the party we hoped for,
But while we are here, we might as well dance....."
:iconchambered-nautilus:
thanks a lot for the fav and the comment! I'll try to revise the third stanza. =D

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"Life may not be the party we hoped for,
But while we are here, we might as well dance....."
:iconchambered-nautilus:
yup, my mind is all set for leisure and relaxation. =D

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"Life may not be the party we hoped for,
But while we are here, we might as well dance....."
:iconalisonia:
Lovely pictures who describe here.....makes me hate Canadian winters!

I think some places could use more description than a plain definition of what you're writing about....describe the place, the emotions, without be obvious.

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